Talk:Margarita Ortega (magonist)/GA1
Latest comment: 9 months ago by The Blue Rider in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: The Blue Rider (talk · contribs) 23:29, 8 November 2023 (UTC)
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General
edit- @Grnrchst: just to let you know that I will be reviewing this article withing the next few days. I aware that you are undergoing a FA review, so take your time if needed! The Blue Rider 00:27, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
Lead
edit- Remove «relatively».
- Removed. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:46, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- The reason why she joined PLM isn't in the body of the article.
- Rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:46, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Add a wikilink to Magonista.
- Added. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:46, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Add a wiklink to eulogised.
- Added. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:46, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
Biography
edit- Is it known which city/town/village she was born? Edit: I see that source #1 says it isn't.
- Aye at best you get differing speculations, but none of them seem more accurate than just saying "Sonora".
- Decapitalize and put in italics «mestizo».
- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Is Pascual Gortari the 1st, 2nd or 3rd husband?
- I'm not sure, none of the sources say. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- How old was Rosaura when she joined the PLM? Or alternatively, add the year she was born in the 1st paragraph.
- Not sure, none of the sources say. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- «left her more conservative husband», by husband I assume you mean Pascual (?).
- Sources just say her "husband", one even says "boyfriend". :/ --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Add a wikilink to party line (politics).
- Done. --12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- How did women played a «a spectacular part in the revolution»?
- Did they manage to overthrow the goverment of Baja California? Likewise for the capture of Mexicali.
- There was no "government of Baja California", because it was just a territory at the time. It wasn't admitted as a state, with its own government, until 1952. It's more like the Magonistas captured parts of Baja California during the power vacuum created by the revolution - they captured it from the Porfiriato but it later came under the control of the Maderistas then the Huertistas. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Add a wikilink to Mexicali.
- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Who is Ricardo Magón and how does he know she said that to her husband and that she died with a smile on her face??
- Magón was the leader of the PLM. And I don't think he did, these were dramatisations he wrote into his eulogy. He was a playwright, after all. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Per some rule of Wikipedia, the quotation needs to have the original text, founded at Espino Becerril 2015, above the translation.
- Which quote, sorry? --Grnrchst (talk) 12:58, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- The big one, «I love you but...».
- @The Blue Rider: This quote is also in English language sources and in the English translation of Flores Magón's article (see Further reading). Do I still need to include the original text? --Grnrchst (talk) 12:30, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
- Ah, found the policy, MOS:FOREIGNQUOTE. It says "If the original, untranslated text is available, provide a reference for it or include it, as appropriate." So in this case, I think its fine. The Blue Rider 12:46, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
Legacy
edit- A tad overquoting in this section, no? If possible, rephrase.
- Probably, but I wasn't sure how else to write it at the time. I'll have a look at rewriting. --Grnrchst (talk) 13:03, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- @The Blue Rider: Rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:38, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
- Alright, everything looks fine. Will be passing the article. The Blue Rider 12:46, 11 November 2023 (UTC)
- Add a wikilink to eulogy.
- Added. --Grnrchst (talk) 13:03, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Who is Benjamin H. Abbott? Perhaps put
histheir profession.
- Clarified. Having looked into them, I just realised I was using the wrong pronoun, so I corrected that too. --Grnrchst (talk) 13:03, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
Stability
edit- Last edited on 30 Oct. and no edit wars were recently in place. The article is stable.
Imaged
edit- All images have tagged with their copyright status, are relevant and have suitable captions.
Copyvio
edit- Earwig's Copyvio Detector points to 24.2% due to quotations.
Sources
edit- All citation numbers are from this version. Checked citation #1, #4, #8, #11, #13, #19, #22, #27, #32.
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