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GA Review

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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 13:49, 15 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]


I'll be reviewing this. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:49, 15 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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Early life and background

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  • Add comma after first regular coach
  • Link football on first mention
  • First sentence of second paragraph is a bit of a run-on and confusing. How about “At age thirteen, Sinner decided to give up skiing and football in favor of tennis. He preferred it over skiing because he preferred to compete directly against an opponent and to have more margin of error over the course of an entire match, and he preferred it over football because he wanted an individual sport where he could make his own decisions.”
    • Changed to: "At age thirteen, Sinner decided to give up skiing and football in favor of tennis. He preferred it over skiing because he wanted to compete directly against an opponent and to have more margin of error over the course of an entire match. He also wanted to be in an individual sport where he could make all of the decisions, an opportunity he would not have in a team sport like football." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:45, 16 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Junior career

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2018–19: Three Challenger titles, Next Gen champion, top 100

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2020: French Open quarterfinal, maiden ATP title, top 40

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2021: Second ATP title, Masters final

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Playing style

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  • Could you say who specifically compared him to Federer? WP editors seem pretty picky about this point. (If it’s too many to mention anybody, could say “compared by people such as…”)
    • The links present it as a general point not attributed to anyone specific. For instance, one source says: "Although Sinner is only 19, he has already been likened to Swiss superstar Roger Federer because of his fluid style, athletic all-court movement and inner calm on the court." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link “groundstroke” on 1st mention
  • For the last sentence, specify who compared Sinner to Djokovic.
  • Take out “As such” – little bit unclear.

Coaches

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Personal life

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  • ”the Cesvi humanitarian organization” – since its linked, probably can just say “Cesvi”
  • ”In parallel” – not a great transition because the concepts aren’t necessarily parallel (other than being positive and negative). The last sentence doesn’t seem related to the first two—I think it would make more sense if you took “In parallel” out and made that sentence its own paragraph.

Career statistics

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References

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Some stuff to work on, but other than what's been mentioned above, article seems to satisfy all the GA criteria! Let me know when these issues are addressed, and I'll give it another look. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:49, 15 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sportsfan77777 Looks good, passing. Great job! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:44, 19 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]