Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/MLS Cup 2022/archive1

MLS Cup 2022

Featured article candidates/MLS Cup 2022/archive1

Nominator(s): Sounder Bruce 00:32, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

One of the most exciting games in American soccer history, which pitted Hollywood money against a blue-collar underdog, and broke several records (and one leg) in 130+ minutes of action. Most of this article was written in the days before and after the game, but has undergone a fair amount of changes through a GAN last year and a more recent GOCE copyedit. I believe it is my finest match article so far of the four MLS Cup articles I have sent to FAC. Sounder Bruce 00:32, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Putting a marker down, I will look at this one when I get a sufficient block of free time (most likely tomorrow evening) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:36, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review by Generalissima

File:LAFC vs Philadelphia Union (2018) by Subashwilfred (20180630233148).jpg CC-BY-SA
File:Steven cherundolo.jpg CC-BY
File:Andre Blake - Philadelphia Union (cropped).jpg CC-BY
File:Jack Elliott (cropped).jpg CC-BY-SA
File:Los Angeles FC vs Philadelphia Union 2022-11-05.svg is CC-BY-SA
File:John McCarthy leaps (cropped).jpg - CC-BY-SA

All look good to me. All have appropriate alt-text, are relevant to the article, and are laid out well. Support. Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 18:38, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like this still needs a source review, so I'll do that this evening! Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 20:52, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"Both clubs finished the regular season atop the Supporters' Shield standings" - pedantically, they can't both have finished atop the standings. Maybe say something like "the two teams tied for the most points in the MLS, but LAFC topped the Supporters' Shield standings based on......" (also at the equivalent point in the body)
- Fixed by mentioning conference tables.
Soccer is linked in the lead but not in the body
- Fixed.
"and was contested by 28 teams that are organized into" => "and was contested by 28 teams organized into"
- Fixed.
"MLS Cup 2022 was the fourth final to be contested between two regular season winners" - "winners" is a bit vague, maybe say "conference champions"....?
- Used "seeds" instead.
"LAFC took first place in Western Conference during the streak" => "LAFC took first place in the Western Conference during the streak"
- Fixed.
"By the mid-point in the season in late June" => "By the mid-point of the season in late June"
- Fixed.
"LAFC had amassed a 11–3–3 record" => "LAFC had amassed an 11–3–3 record"
- Fixed.
"The Union sent Blake, and defenders" - don't think that comma is needed
- Fixed.
"who were without forwa rd Talles Magno" - there's a random space in the middle of a word
- Fixed.
"but instead finished a mis-timed clearance from the NYCFC defense" => "but instead finishing a mis-timed clearance from the NYCFC defense"
- Reworded to be more clear, the sequence was quite chaotic.
Elliott image caption needs a full stop
- Added.
"LAFC won a free kick from a similar spot in the 39th minute they almost used to score" => "LAFC won a free kick from a similar spot in the 39th minute which they almost used to score"
- Fixed with some tweaks.
"In the 128th minute, LAFC equalized through a Diego Palacios cross that Gareth Bale headed in" => "In the 128th minute, LAFC equalized when Gareth Bale headed in a Diego Palacios cross"
- Fixed.
McCarthy image caption needs a full stop
- Added.
That's all I got, and it's all pretty minor. Great work! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 19:12, 27 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: Thanks for catching all of those! I have completed fixes for each one of them. Sounder Bruce 02:03, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:26, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Eem dik doun in toene

"(now known as BMO Stadium)" - don't think this is relevant as this name came into use after the final was played. I would either remove this or say "from ... known as BMO Stadium"
- Moved to the Venue section, since it still has some minor relevance.
  - Would add "from 2023" instead of "now" since the latter word is a bit vague.
    - Changed and cited.
"... but LAFC won the Supporters' Shield with the wins tiebreaker." ==> So LAFC won the tiebreaker and were allowed to play the match at their home stadium. Why was/is there no neutral ground to host the final?
- The highest-seeded finalist hosts; the explanation is given at the MLS Cup article and probably doesn't make sense to repeat in the articles for each edition.
  - Understood, thanks
"LAFC also finished as runners-up in the 2020 CONCACAF Champions League but missed the playoffs in 2021" ==> these are different competitions, I therefore think something like "..., and missed..." (or what you prefer) would fit better here than "but".
- Fixed.
Maybe link words such as goalkeeper (in the body of the article), corner kick and draw (in the body and lede)?
- Added.
"11–3–3 record" ==> maybe use the template here to explain that this means 11 wins, 3 losses and 3 draws?
- Added.
"Five minuites later" - typo
- Fixed.
"equaled the highest-scoring MLS Cup final alongside the 2003 final" ==> who were the teams in 2003 and what was the score?
- Added.
"in the Champions League semifinals" ==> semifinals is written with no capital letter, but e.g., "Conference Semifinals" is. Is it standard practice to write the stages of the American competitions with a capital letters but the continental ones without one?
- There is a long-running MOS dispute over capitalization and how it works in American sports, but the gist is that the "Conference Semifinals/Finals" are a proper title and branded separately (similar to the Divisional Series in baseball) while in international competitions they are not given special treatment and thus not capitalized.
  - Ah that's clear, cheers
Fine work. It's comprehensive and well-written. Eem dik doun in toene (talk) 17:32, 28 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Eem dik doun in toene: Thanks for the review. I have addressed your comments and look forward to further feedback. Sounder Bruce 03:14, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  - Just the one minor remark from me left, cheers. Eem dik doun in toene (talk) 11:46, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    - @Eem dik doun in toene: Answered that last remark. Sounder Bruce 01:24, 31 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Support - Eem dik doun in toene (talk) 06:25, 31 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]