Talk:Central Synagogue (Manhattan)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 21:30, 29 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 07:04, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

Will also pick this up as well.--ZKang123 (talk) 07:04, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

Copy changes

Lead

• The building, designed by Henry Fernbach in the Moorish Revival style, is a New York City designated landmark and a National Historic Landmark. – Designed by Henry Fernbach in the Moorish Revival style, the synagogue is a New York City designated landmark and a National Historic Landmark.
• A vestibule leads to the synagogue's sanctuary, a two-level space arranged in a similar manner to a Gothic church, and there are various rooms in the basement. – A vestibule leads to the synagogue's sanctuary – a two-level space arranged similarly to a Gothic church, with various rooms in the basement.
• There is a community house across 55th Street, which contains the synagogue's religious school and numerous groups. – A community house across 55th Street contains/hosts the synagogue's religious school and numerous groups.

Early history

• was originally built for Ahawath Chesed as that congregation's fifth building. – was originally built as Ahawath Chesed's fifth building.
• and Lilienthal departed in 1847 – would just say "left in 1847"
• at 69 Ludlow Street, on the Lower East Side of Manhattan. – remove comma
• Following the arrival of additional Bohemian Jews to the U.S. – "more Bohemian Jews..."
• Just remember to add inflation values (e.g. $58.32 and one-half cent, $100)
• which many of the congregants – "of the" is unnecessary
• moved to the Eleventh Presbyterian Church,[32] at the – , located at the...
• —though not those in banking or mercantile trades, who instead joined Congregation Emanu-El of New York. – personally felt this isn't really as relevant here, but it's fine.
• voted to establish a committee to acquire a new building. – voted to establish a committee for the acquisition of a new building.
• may have wanted – is it something uncertain and what the original source thinks?
• that congregants would choose to leave – ...congregants would leave
• Kohut's views were more conservative than Huebsch's had been – remove "had been"
• although Kohut gave sermons – although he.... From the first clause it's clear who is giving sermons
• The descendants of Jewish immigrants were increasingly speaking English. – More descendants of Jewish immigrants were English-speaking.
• It took two years for Ahawath Chesed to hire – Ahawath Chese took two years to hire...
• Davidson resigned in 1899,[110] in part because he had been against the congregations' merger. – Davidson resigned in 1889 partly due to his opposition to the congregations' merger.
• to begin keeping – to keep...

More comments to come.--ZKang123 (talk) 03:10, 9 July 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for taking up the review. I've addressed all of the above so far. – Epicgenius (talk) 22:55, 9 July 2024 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

• Earwig mainly flags some common phrases of place and organisational names.
• Probably this part needs to be rephrased: A small row of arches runs just below the cornice, at the roof line. to A small row of arches runs at the roof line just below the cornice

A more detailed spotcheck would follow.--ZKang123 (talk) 03:10, 9 July 2024 (UTC)

Images

All photos are under CC-BY or BY-SA licensed, some of which are taken by the nominator. I like the infobox image by the way.