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* Will see if I can find anything to quibble about. [[User:AryKun|AryKun]] ([[User talk:AryKun|talk]]) 21:12, 23 June 2024 (UTC)
::[[User:AryKun|AryKun]], nudge. [[User:Gog the Mild|Gog the Mild]] ([[User talk:Gog the Mild|talk]]) 18:14, 30 June 2024 (UTC)
* The use of the Oxford comma is uneven.
*"is the largest living cat species and a member of the genus Panthera native to Asia." Confusing to read and seems like it implies that it's the largest cat native to Asia. Maybe split it into two sentences instead: "is a species of cat native to Asia. It is the largest living cat and a member of the genus Panthera."
* "with black, mostly vertical stripes" to "with mostly vertical black stripes"?
* "and island tigers" to "and the island tigers"?
* The wl for Endangered in both the lead and body lead to the article for the general concept, not the IUCN classification.
* "Tigers are also...prey is scarce." doesn't make sense, how can they be victims for preying on livestock?
* "ratified conservation action plans, established anti-poaching patrols" to "ratified conservation action plans and established anti-poaching patrols".
* "Major reasons for this decline...medicinal purposes." The previous sentence refers to a decline in its range, which the latter two reasons mentioned here are not responsible for.
* "subordinated the species under the genus" reads weirdly to me, I'd use "placed the species in the genus" instead.
* "early 21st centuries, the Bengal" to "early 21st centuries, namely the Bengal"?
* "The validity...Greater Sunda Islands." Run-on and difficult to understand.
* "from a of low 5% to" typo.
* "in between three and nine week intervals" to "at intervals of between three and nine weeks"?
* "paid bounties for tigers since 1757" to "paid bounties for tigers beginning in 1757"?
* The George V statistic is a factoid and not really DUE imo.
* The articles linked in See Also seem very randomly thrown together. Why are we linking one random tiger attack from 2007 and Tiger King instead of other man-eaters that have eaten dozens of people or a cultural depiction of tigers that wasn't a 3 week phenom during COVID?
* Refs seem fine.
* That's what I got. [[User:AryKun|AryKun]] ([[User talk:AryKun|talk]]) 14:21, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
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